Aw, well done! Normally writing things in the present tense drives me up the wall but you inject just enough personality to pull it off, and it works for such a short scene. I especially like Bumblebee's little subtle sense of humor, where he speaks directly but still doesn't mind using a record scratch to make the situation a little weirder than it already was. ;)
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Date: 2008-08-07 01:08 am (UTC)